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                                    "an explosion", she said
                 I turned to ask her what she was talking about when I
       caught sight of the tv screen, and for the tiniest of moments I caught
    myself thinking that there's something beautiful about that much energy and
 so much destruction; energy - would it wipe me off my feet? maybe melt the skin
right off of my bones? heat, death and poison, I don't believe there's much you or I
would be able to feel dying in those flames, and I should probably be ashamed that I
                            sitting comfortably in my living room
                                                 can
                                                have
                                                those
                                                 way
                                                 too
                                                 ca-
                                                 sual
                                             thoughts;
                              but a lot of people die everyday
                     and to decide to cry for all of them would be
                              to give up breathing for yourself
Concrete poetry has been a mystery to me for a long time; today, I decided to give it another go.

Form inspired by this picture.

13/6: wow, a Daily Deviation! :onfire: Thanks for the feature, and for every fav and comment on this piece, I feel very flattered. :blowkiss:
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Given 2013-06-13
mushroom cloud is an explosion of simple, powerful ideas by ~miserabel. ( Featured by neurotype )
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I was just revisiting some of the literature in my favourites and it struck my quite vividly again - just how mind-blowingly perfect the flow of this poem is. It's like a little creek or a scarf slipping off the table and the composition of ideas is just-

Then you went and reflected it perfectly in the visual form-
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miserabel Jun 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Oh, thanks a lot! Glad you enjoy this so much, I feel flattered :hug:
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A late congratulations, ~miserabel This is a stroke of genius. Thank you.
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miserabel Jun 17, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:tighthug: thank you! You really are stroking my ego here :meow:
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:lol: You're welcome. :iconcopterglomp1plz::iconcopterglomp2plz:
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PostJudgement Jun 15, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
The story is so simple, but it hits the reader right in the heart and just quivers for a little. I, for one, can't stop thinking about it. Thank you for writing this!
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miserabel Jun 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
And thank you for taking the time to read and comment :bow: good to hear that the story caught you like this.
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PostJudgement Jun 16, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
my pleasure :)
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nichodo Jun 13, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
"nuclear launch detected"

Nice shape and poem.
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PrincessTwili Jun 13, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Heh, you know, I just saw an umbrella, and I know that's a bit off, but it kind of made sense if you think about tears and crying and that whole raincloud-of-sadness-over-Eeyore's-head kinda deal XD
So this has a slight double meaning, if that's worth anything :D
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