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May 13, 2013
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                                    "an explosion", she said
                 I turned to ask her what she was talking about when I
       caught sight of the tv screen, and for the tiniest of moments I caught
    myself thinking that there's something beautiful about that much energy and
 so much destruction; energy - would it wipe me off my feet? maybe melt the skin
right off of my bones? heat, death and poison, I don't believe there's much you or I
would be able to feel dying in those flames, and I should probably be ashamed that I
                            sitting comfortably in my living room
                              but a lot of people die everyday
                     and to decide to cry for all of them would be
                              to give up breathing for yourself
Concrete poetry has been a mystery to me for a long time; today, I decided to give it another go.

Form inspired by this picture.

13/6: wow, a Daily Deviation! :onfire: Thanks for the feature, and for every fav and comment on this piece, I feel very flattered. :blowkiss:
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Given 2013-06-13
mushroom cloud is an explosion of simple, powerful ideas by ~miserabel. ( Featured by neurotype )
days-be-strange Featured By Owner 6 days ago  Student Writer
This is really good. Probably one of the best examples of concrete poetry I've ever read. 
miserabel Featured By Owner 5 days ago  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much! :hug:
days-be-strange Featured By Owner 5 days ago  Student Writer
No problem. 
Publicitart1 Featured By Owner May 5, 2014  Student Interface Designer
Hello ,

Submit your poetry to be placed in postcard in an exhibition at the Alliance Française in Niteroi , Rio de Janeiro . Until May 10 .

Registration Form " Poetry in Pencas " :

Example of how poetry will be shown at the Alliance Française :…

Bidding Alliance Française available :

Choose a theme to poetry :
1 - Respect for diversity is sustainable living .
2 - Love unites us: love between groups , couples in the world on the Internet .
3 A- Changing your feeling you change your action : A - Everything recycles up to you : feelings , energy, interior encounter , life longlearning = continuing education .
B - 3 Changing your feeling you change your action : Everything is recycled out of you : Digital Divide , mobility , education stages . Note: Everything is recycled : They'll have two images related recycles everything related to sewage recycling , using banana style of FOSSA ECOLOGICAL or septic tank .

QUEEP in touch !
wei-en Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2013
I was just revisiting some of the literature in my favourites and it struck my quite vividly again - just how mind-blowingly perfect the flow of this poem is. It's like a little creek or a scarf slipping off the table and the composition of ideas is just-

Then you went and reflected it perfectly in the visual form-
miserabel Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Oh, thanks a lot! Glad you enjoy this so much, I feel flattered :hug:
xlntwtch Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2013   Writer
A late congratulations, ~miserabel This is a stroke of genius. Thank you.
miserabel Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:tighthug: thank you! You really are stroking my ego here :meow:
xlntwtch Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2013   Writer
:lol: You're welcome. :iconcopterglomp1plz::iconcopterglomp2plz:
PostJudgement Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
The story is so simple, but it hits the reader right in the heart and just quivers for a little. I, for one, can't stop thinking about it. Thank you for writing this!
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