The love between child and mother - daughter and mother, in this case - is, in my opinion, a beautiful topic to write about. This is a nice read, and the emotion comes through clearly through your lines and rhymes.
In that aspect, it is poetry well done.
I personally feel the piece suffers a bit through it's length. Of course this is very personal, but I feel this piece would do a lot better if it was only a third of its length. The strongest parts, in my opinion, are the first two lines of the second stanza, and the last stanzas, starting with "But I'll never know the chosen child", so I would cut all the rest away.
Very drastic, naturally, and there's no need for you to actually do that - but my literature teacher has told us of poets who work on their pieces by continuing to cut them down for years and years, until they're tiny things. Maybe something to keep in mind, or play around with.
Also, I feel the need to question the focus on things you'll "never know" of a person you so obviously love - doing that makes it look like there's a certain distance between the speaker and the person who this piece has been written for. If this is intentional, then that's fine, but I feel it is rather an accidental side-effect. First off, talking of how you'll never meet your mother in her life before you is a very original point and I love the idea, but it reads - to me - like all these things the speaker will never know are physical walls between these two people, like they'll be forever separated by one of them not knowing the other person's colours, or their inner summer child. I'm not sure how to give you a suggestion for this, it's more of a personal feeling or impression this has left on me. I simply feel that just focussing less on things that are forever to be unknown would maybe change the tone of this piece to something warmer, and more accessible to me personally.
So much for overall impression. I shall continue to break down a couple of details - which means, yes, I shall nit-pick
. Use any of these points as you see fit, please!
missing words - I felt twice throughout this piece that a word simply disappeared from where it should be. 2nd stanza: "But the only way I know is one" - shouldn't that say "the only way I know you"? 5th stanza: "I'll never know to look at you / with a special sort of awe" - feels like that should say "without" instead of with.
the word "never" appears frequently in this - eleven times, if I counted correctly, ignoring the title. Now, of course it's a good idea to tie the title to the poem and all, but "never" is a strong, emotional word in my opinion, that - strangely - uses weight the more we use it. Here, too, it loses weight with continuous use.
the stanza that begins with "Mom!" feels disruptive to me, with these little snippets of conversations. Even though I think I grasp your intention, "What - Where - There" is so different from the whole rest of the poem that it seems to fall out of line a bit. And then, "That sound, unique to your ears alone" - what sound? The sound of being called by her children? Personally, I feel it would be better to spend a line or two describing the sound(s) instead of the "What - Where - There - Mom - Momma - Mother" conversation snippets.
So, that was that! I hope I didn't put you off too much with my, ahem, lengthy commenting. As I said, you're free to treat this critique as you like, ignore it, keep some points in mind for the future or not, as you wish. This is your piece, do as you see fit! I simply gave you my own view of your work.
The affection in this poem is plain and lovely, so even though I personally would give it an overhaul, there's no need for you to do that.
Have a nice day!